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    Author: Tenirsk
    ASL Info:    16/F/N/A
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 4/17/29
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Prose/Angry
    Total Views: 166
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    She consumes men. Her name is all. She値l make them work hard, fall hard; she breaks the backs of lovers and takes those that are fresh from other痴. She値l make you wish you never met her, and yet you値l yearn to be consumed by her; an unlikely addiction for your own destruction.

    No, you値l be wishing you never ever met her at all, after you break the heart of another; your lover. This is your call back from an impending mistake.

    Remember the slender arms that hold you, not bind you.
    Remember the warm eyes that see you, not past you.
    Remember the heated nights that content you, not burn you.

    Fire consumes men. It痴 name is lust. She値l enslave them, work hard for her, fall hard; she値l break the backs of men and take those that are not her痴 from others. She値l make you wish you never met her, and you値l yearn to be in the past with another; a likely mistake in your own destruction.

    No, you値l be fine, I知 sure; as you move along through life causing fires in the hearts of another; just another lover. This is not a call back, a mistakes is already made.

    Remember the lesson of love.
    Remember the lesson that wanton taught.
    Remember the fire in my heart when I banished you.




    Submitted on 2007-01-25 19:18:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fire consumes men. It痴 name is lust. She値l enslave them, work hard for her, fall hard; she値l break the backs of men and take those that are not her痴 from others. She値l make you wish you never met her, and you値l yearn to be in the past with another; a likely mistake in your own destruction.

    No, you値l be fine, I知 sure; as you move along through life causing fires in the hearts of another; just another lover. This is not a call back, a (mistake) is already made.

    Remember the lesson of love.
    Remember the lesson that wanton taught.
    Remember the fire in my heart when I banished you.



    This is a sobering essay on the fate of the wandering eye as it's snapped out of its socket. I can almost envision this as a warning from someone lost in hell, crying out to the living as they continue to make the same mistakes and shrug off the ghost of an object lesson. Or perhaps the consumer herself is warning the lamb about to be slaughtered exactly what sort of fate it should expect. Obviously no one is listening.

    Very nice use of structure and style.
    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Really different. But I like the style it was written in. Most people can't pull something like that off.

    "Remember the slender arms that hold you, not bind you.
    Remember the warm eyes that see you, not past you.
    Remember the heated nights that content you, not burn you."

    The couple of stanzas that are like this are good.

    On a personal note, I can't stand when women consume. Too many leeches out there and not enough hosts. Thankfully, the relationship I'm in right now is mostly free from all that loathing crap.

    I enjoyed it, most eliteskills posts aren't as interesting as this.

    Steve

    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by SpartanSteve | [ Reply to This ]



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