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    dots Submission Name: Not Alonedots

    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNot Alonedots

    broken hearts
    bleeding writst
    a few of the things
    i could never missed

    jimmy and coke
    that slutty lil girl
    i wish i would have choked

    yelling parents
    worhtless cries
    dating a boy
    who wishes i would die

    emo friends
    locked in the dark
    just anouther addition
    to my life falling apart

    mailbox empty
    nothing knew
    sit and wonder
    if i can think things through

    gun in the right hand
    pills in the left
    so many options
    but some with greater affects

    a morbid mind
    raging thoughts
    some will remember
    some have already forgot

    a dead pen
    thousand words
    despite the result
    i wont go unheard

    6ft under
    the grey tomb stone
    for the first time ever
    i wont feel alone

    Submitted on 2007-01-25 19:23:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oooh nice one like i said your a great writer dont forget it ok well sorry my comments r boring im not really good at them i just tell people if i like thier poem or whatever
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by Cara R.D | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhhh, a suicidal poem. Well ,i've written plenty of these, and commented on even more. So with this one I wont bash, I'll compliment.

    Your usage of the pills and gun being so many options is significantly so true. There truely is more than one way to skin a cat. And the imagery on the last stanza was creepy but fun in a sick twisted way that frankly i admire.

    ~The Silenced Poet
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by Silenced poet | [ Reply to This ]

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