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    dots Submission Name: Magnetic Poetrydots
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    Author: emo-tastic
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 571/566/128
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMagnetic Poetrydots
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    Magnetic poetry has me enthralled again.
    Simple words form phrases.

    Between here and morning
    love him
    then easy out.

    I play matchmaker
    and fail.




    Submitted on 2007-01-25 21:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem has a very fascinating structure. I'm not entirely sure what you mean by "magnetic poetry" but it's certainly got me attracted (okay fine, lame joke).
    The first stanza seems out of place with the rest, but I suppose I haven't seen enough poems of this length to actually consider anything beyond it, but it is fantastically abstract and somewhat, dreamy. Enjoyable, perhaps you might like to try out much more of this style.
    I especially like the last stanza/line for some reason, it's just hanging and ambiguous, like Ray Bradbury's A Sound of Thunder.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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