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    dots Submission Name: Thicker Than Water (not so much)dots
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    Author: Skillessbasterd
    ASL Info:    19/withdiseasedstrangers/
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 497/676/207
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       some stories are just too long to read twice.


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    dotsThicker Than Water (not so much)dots
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    It’s not so much the dollars or the sense of this that hurts
    it’s the blood you’ve spilled
    and the bond you’ve killed
    for your betterment of worse

    It’s not so much your makeshift fix of a selfish broken truth
    It’s the way that you lied
    With tears welled in eyes
    With no reason for excuse

    Tears fall quick
    But blood is thicker
    So no matter how in vein
    You will always remain
    My sister

    But

    You

    Are

    No longer my friend.




    Submitted on 2007-01-25 23:16:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ha...

    no nitpicks here - sorry
    just sad little mmhmms (or ramblings more like it). my apologies in advance for what follows...

    I can relate.
    Well sort of.
    So I guess this would be two weird examples of the same thing)...

    My ex's family was so damned disfunctional in how they interacted. I mean weirdly and sadly disfunctional (and not that I didn't have any of my own, disfunction; this just went beyond)...

    I hated my bro in law.... hated. I have never disliked a human being more than he (which is a long ass story in itself).

    He used to throw at me: but you are family, you are supposed to love me.

    so not...

    I did not like him; at all. And in my mind, maybe blood would have allowed me to love and not like... my excuse was, I just married into it. I really had no ties, nor wanted them - ever.

    I can also turn this around and say the ex loved me yet didn't like me....

    which was a strange thing when I finally recognized it. Somehow, that liking part was much more important - at least there was a connection.

    I think I need more coffee.



    | Posted on 2008-11-13 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      ah i know this feeling a little too well....the whole just because i love you doesn't mean i have to like you situation with family. it's sad to know that your own family can get you to a point of only loving them just because they are your family.

    i spose for a little nitpicking, i'm not too fond of the format for the first two stanzas. but i also think it wouldn't be just an easy fix either, because the longer sentences make better impacts as being one sentence rather than chopping it up. so i dont know what to give ya on that one.

    sorry that you're feeling this way about your sister Ry...hope your situation gets better
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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