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    dots Submission Name: A Hazardous Fakedots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsA Hazardous Fakedots
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    Broken glass on the inside
    Steel on the outside
    I'm lined with lies
    And I'm shielded with deception
    Emotionless black eyes
    Fake porcelin smile
    Everything I build up
    Only to let myself tear down
    No one can understand
    Why I can't let myself frown
    No emotion on my face
    Only the bleeding on my inside
    Another secret disgrace
    So fake, yet so real
    I can't let you in
    To show you exactly how I feel
    I've been hurt too many times
    And I'm tired of falling
    Believeing all their lies
    The people I loved the most
    Ended up ruining me in the end
    No reason for living
    I might as well be dead
    Who wants to live a lie?
    Having to hide from the world
    Just want to die...






    Submitted on 2007-01-26 11:38:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      omg, i have felt like this ALOT
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      omg, i have felt like this ALOT,
    forget what people think about you, forget that they are there, be true to yourself and be the unique you that i know you are on the inside.... i feel the same, there are some poeple that i cannot let them get to know me. keep on writing and dont let the world ge you down, eaiser said then done, i know...
    there are people who will love you for you no matter what you do.........

    Isabella
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with psyko. but structurally one thing you may wanna consider is breakinag up the poem into stanzas so that it is easier to follow.
    good job keep on writing.

    Selene
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      so stop being so fake, regardless of what other people think... someone will think your a cool chick, and the rest can go [censored] themselves.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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