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    dots Submission Name: A Hazardous Fakedots

    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsA Hazardous Fakedots

    Broken glass on the inside
    Steel on the outside
    I'm lined with lies
    And I'm shielded with deception
    Emotionless black eyes
    Fake porcelin smile
    Everything I build up
    Only to let myself tear down
    No one can understand
    Why I can't let myself frown
    No emotion on my face
    Only the bleeding on my inside
    Another secret disgrace
    So fake, yet so real
    I can't let you in
    To show you exactly how I feel
    I've been hurt too many times
    And I'm tired of falling
    Believeing all their lies
    The people I loved the most
    Ended up ruining me in the end
    No reason for living
    I might as well be dead
    Who wants to live a lie?
    Having to hide from the world
    Just want to die...

    Submitted on 2007-01-26 11:38:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg, i have felt like this ALOT
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      omg, i have felt like this ALOT,
    forget what people think about you, forget that they are there, be true to yourself and be the unique you that i know you are on the inside.... i feel the same, there are some poeple that i cannot let them get to know me. keep on writing and dont let the world ge you down, eaiser said then done, i know...
    there are people who will love you for you no matter what you do.........

    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with psyko. but structurally one thing you may wanna consider is breakinag up the poem into stanzas so that it is easier to follow.
    good job keep on writing.

    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      so stop being so fake, regardless of what other people think... someone will think your a cool chick, and the rest can go [censored] themselves.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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