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    dots Submission Name: Tears of the Sundots
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    Author: Lil gal
    ASL Info:    32/F-ya/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 355/216/36
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
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    Description:
       This has been stuck in my head for a lil while now and I figured I should finally post it and see what everyone thinks so please let me know, thanks.


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    dotsTears of the Sundots
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    O' hail the sunlight
    Glimmering off tears falling
    like dew rolling down




    Submitted on 2007-01-26 11:51:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice.
    the first couple times thru this i had this picture in my mind of a dew drop dancing on the tip of a dark green summer leaf.
    then upon rereading i realized it says "tears falling/like dew..."
    so is it actual tears or actual dew,hmmm.
    the important thing is is that it puts a crystal clear image in the readers mind whichever way you look at it.
    is that the important thing?
    now i'm confused.
    i like this a lot.
    not the confusion, the haiku and the fact that it's making me think...
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    | Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love haikus and minimalistic pieces - I like the use of the Sun and the tears - works great in this little haiku diddy!

    Good!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Very lovely Haiku! It's a form that proves too much of a challenge for my brain, but that fact allows me to appreciate those who are able to do justice to few words that speak beyond their brevity. You have accomplished just that! Smiles, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Shann-n, this is a beautiful Haiku! It paints a much broader word picture than the shortness of the verse! How about "Tears of the Sun" for a title?
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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