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    dots Submission Name: heartachedots
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    Author: TammyAnnBruton
    ASL Info:    31/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 202/148/30
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    The day has come to see what we have made,
    A boy or a girl, either will be okay.
    Entered the Dr's. Office, our whole family inside,
    To see the child that likes to hide.

    We find out that there is no hearbeat,
    No movement of arms or feet,
    My own heart wanting to cease,
    My baby I wanted so bad, deceased.

    I gave birth the natural way.
    A little boy, that God has taken away.
    The only thing keeping me sane,
    Thinking that he's is in a better place,
    And I will see him again, Someday.

    Mournfully, I left the hospital without my son,
    With comfort from my loved ones.
    Though my heartache still remains,
    The love of my husband and children eases the pain.




    Submitted on 2007-01-26 13:12:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am sorry for your heartache. Life can be incredibly unfair sometimes. Not that I personally believe in a heaven, but that little life that you carried inside of you still is with you to this day. You are lucky to have a caring and understanding family.
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      I can really relate to this write because I had a miscarriage last year, I think maybe it was for the best because I'm only young and it was unplanned, but I still wonder what it would be like having a little girl to care for.
    You portrayed the emotions from excitement, to shock and pain very well.
    It was a vey touching and heartbreaking write and very well put together.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by SilverScent | [ Reply to This ]


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