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    dots Submission Name: Waiting In Linedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWaiting In Linedots
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    All of your love is somewhere else I know.
    I canít help but think about you all aglow.
    I play my heartís flute,
    To which you seem mute.
    All my feelings astir,
    Still no reaction from her.
    All my words Strawberry sweet.
    I heard you say "No," no need to repeat.
    My time will come I will prevail,
    Because fate for me can never fail.
    Youíre a beautiful creature,
    I take in your every feature.
    I am under you spell,
    Girl, why canít you tell.
    I know I will be where I belong soon,
    Under your passionate eyes those lovely moons.
    You want me to cover my feelings in a shroud,
    But I canít help my heart from screaming out loud.
    Since Iím caught in your blissful charms,
    I will wait till you come running into my arms.
    In the meanwhile all I have is time,
    So Iíll just continue writing my loveís rhyme.




    Submitted on 2004-01-31 00:32:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Submission 1332= 666*2. Funny it to be a poem of unreturned love.
    | Posted on 2004-02-09 00:00:00 | by Webmaster | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. Nice rhythm. Keep up the good work Soulraven.
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]


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