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    dots Submission Name: The Hidden Blossomdots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Hidden Blossomdots
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    Look at me please,
    with eyes that can see,
    past this illusion,
    look deep inside me.
    Iím so tired of this mask.
    Iím sick of pretending.
    Iím not up to this task.
    Iím sick of lending
    pieces of me
    so no one ever knows
    the part of me
    that so badly wants to grow
    into something.
    A flower bursting with the need to bloom.
    A seedling aching for the room
    to branch out,
    to become
    somethingÖ
    someone.




    Submitted on 2007-01-26 14:20:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it but i agree with Aaron-to and point- it could be longer and that might make it more powerful, but the lenght it is now seems like it emphasises the need to burst out and grow and in that way i think its really great. so i think thew poem could go either way and still be good i guess it depends on how you want to convey the messege and emotion. good job though.
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]


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