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    dots Submission Name: *The Concequences Of Lovedots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Story/Being a Teen
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       in the very rough stages...it is something i found scribbled on a note paper....it's not finished

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    dots*The Concequences Of Lovedots

    You drive up in your sexy sports car and gently close the door. When you get to my footstep my father hesitantly lets you in. Then as I slowly descend the stairs one at a time, you can't take your eyes off of me.
    “You look very beautiful tonight,” you say, as you take my arm and guide me to the door, opening it for me with more chivalry than I have ever seen. I think that is what I was attracted to first and what keeps me tied to you. Along with your good looks and charisma.
    On our way to the restaurant you suggest we get take-out instead. Of course I have no objections. We go through the drive-thru at Harvey's and head on up to "Lover's Lane".
    As soon as we pull up you move closer and start to kiss me. Minutes later we aren't even aware of the food anymore.
    My body starts to surrender under your sweet caresses and meaningful kisses. As your lips touch my pale flesh I feel that rush of electricity all the way though to my toenails. Your hands moving over my body guided by passion and love.
    “I love you,” you chant over and over and over again in my ear between sensual kisses.
    “Wait, stop, before we go to far" I weakly say, but it's no use because my words are drowned out by your groans of pleasure. As we start to shed our clothing, I hear constant promises of forever that I hope we can keep.

    Submitted on 2007-01-26 15:17:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "constant promises of forever that I hope we can keep"

    That's such a beautiful line. It's too bad that "forever" is usually nothing more than a word.

    Anyway, I usually don't read stories, but I liked this. It's kind of overdone, but the descriptions are wonderful.

    Good stuff
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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