Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Thankful...Stilldots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 1238
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1682



    Description:
       When a love ends, there are a lot of feelings that will never end, that will STILL be there, no matter how much time goes by. The anger, and the hurt will still be there. As will the love and the good memories...and I guess that's what you focus on, and when each day ends, you just gotta be thankful, even with all the bad stuff, that you got a chance to experience the good. No matter how much it hurts. I love this quote...and I guess it's where I was going with this write.. "I won't cry because you're gone. I'll smile because at one time you were here." And even as much as THAT hurts...it's so true.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThankful...Stilldots
    -------------------------------------------


    Sleepless nights,
    Endless dreams,
    Never-ending pain,
    Flooding Memories,
    Still

    His face in her dreams,
    Sleep, interrupted by the memory
    Of his touch in the middle of the night,
    Of his lips on her skin,
    Gentle enough not to wake her,
    But so she knew he was there.
    Strong arms held her body and her heart,
    So close to his, she can hear the beat of his love,
    Even today, even still.

    The words of goodbye,
    Of never again,
    Of finality, echo continuously.
    The questions run rampant,
    The anger she tries not to feel,
    Creeps into existence, and the pain,
    Drops her to her knees, every time.
    The chance she’ll never get,
    Haunts her every second.
    The thought of him not happy,
    Would haunt her even more.
    So she holds her head high,
    And she breaks with every step,
    While the confusion never leaves,
    The hurt never stops, never subsides,
    Even today, even Still.

    For making her hidden heart brave
    And awaking a soul that was never alive
    For opening his arms, along with his heart,
    And repeatedly catching her,
    For the patience, devotion, dedication,
    The always gentle touch,
    The laughs,
    The fights with smiles on their faces,
    For that one dance that changed her life,
    That dance that ended in LOVE.
    For saying her name, like no one ever could,
    She remains just one thing,
    After it all, through her tears, she is simply,
    Thankful.
    Even today, even Still.




    Submitted on 2007-01-27 14:19:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      depressing, but even with a sadness there is a gilded horizon, as you masterfully showed, thankfulness that what happened happened, and you couldnt have it happen any other way.

    just a question, are these really just "random thoughts"...cause I would say that they are rather personal and probably have preoccupied your thoughts for some time now. I hope youve found some sort of liberation or relief by writing this down. and maybe he'll realize that true happiness was just with you.

    but who knows, we all have our own battles to fight, and I hope you win yours. (the title especially attracted my attention because it has one of the same keywords in the title, and it is also about someone I cared/care about)
    keep up the writing,

    jc prescott
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by jcpdandalice | [ Reply to This ]
      What a superb;y emotional and endearing write this is. It captures perfectly the essence of a lost love.

    Superb stuff again from you Hallie.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    133268

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry