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    dots Submission Name: You wake up latedots
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    Author: LadyMerlina
    ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60/93/58
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYou wake up latedots
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    I refuse to let the day go to waste.
    I crave for the sunshine.
    I do not care if my sleep is fractured.
    I don't pay it any mind.

    Smiling and awake
    I am just glad to have slept.
    You slither out of bed
    sluggish and unkept,
    mumble something about bad breath.

    Your time lingers and melts
    No wonder you never notice
    How much of your life is a mess.

    By the time you're finished breakfast
    I will have cleaned the appartment
    done the dishes, taken a shower
    and dressed.

    My day's already alive
    When yours hasn't even begun.
    Just so you know, that big yellow ball
    in the sky, that's the sun.








    Submitted on 2007-01-27 16:07:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My favorite part about this is probably the ending. It's kind of like you're telling someone "Hey, wake up. This is life we're living and you're obviously not living it. Get outside, smell the roses."

    To me this seems like a relationship gone sour; one person has gotten to sluggish and apathetic to even wake up or do anything on time.

    Great job.
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]


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