You wake up late

Author: LadyMerlina ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60 /93 /58 Words: 124

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You wake up late

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I refuse to let the day go to waste. I crave for the sunshine. I do not care if my sleep is fractured. I don't pay it any mind. Smiling and awake I am just glad to have slept. You slither out of bed sluggish and unkept, mumble something about bad breath. Your time lingers and melts No wonder you never notice How much of your life is a mess. By the time you're finished breakfast I will have cleaned the appartment done the dishes, taken a shower and dressed. My day's already alive When yours hasn't even begun. Just so you know, that big yellow ball in the sky, that's the sun.

Submitted on 2007-01-27 16:07:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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My favorite part about this is probably the ending. It's kind of like you're telling someone "Hey, wake up. This is life we're living and you're obviously not living it. Get outside, smell the roses." To me this seems like a relationship gone sour; one person has gotten to sluggish and apathetic to even wake up or do anything on time. Great job.

| Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]

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