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    dots Submission Name: To you I leavedots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTo you I leavedots
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    To you I leave
    My wrold,
    It was given to you already

    To you I leave
    My heart,
    It is broken and useless to me

    To you I leave
    My love,
    It was rejected by another already

    To you I leave
    My memories,
    They are filled to the brim
    Ready to be dumped

    To you I leave
    My feelings,
    All that I hlod dear to me and all that I regret

    To all I leave
    My body,
    It's cold, dead and bloody

    I have no last reguest
    Just a razor, A throat, and paper




    Submitted on 2007-01-27 17:40:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think i like the last 3 lines best but nice job though.

    Be Blessed,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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