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    dots Submission Name: Romeo and Julietdots
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    Author: tennisfuzz
    ASL Info:    21/F/wandering.
    Elite Ratio:    5.72 - 79/98/40
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
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       i had to write something today, so i did. Its not helping me get rid of any emotion really, but i dont know... im curios, what will happen next...


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    dotsRomeo and Julietdots
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    Trepidation
    I tremble when I think, we may never
    Speak…
    “Wherefore art thou”

    I pray in a guessed futility
    Try and ignore obvious rationality
    Hoping you will find a way
    Somehow…
    “Deny thy father and refuse thy name”

    Hoping you will make the world disappear
    Except for us, an endless horizon
    Never forgetting
    Never forsaking
    "These violent delights have violent ends . . ."




    Submitted on 2007-01-27 21:59:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awwww oh dear. Romeo and Juliet. There is just something timeless about that. Although I think this poem could use some revision... I like that it didn't ramble on but was quite to the point. In response to 'nevender' 's comment.... yeah, the title is at first cliché... but sometimes things that are cliché are there because they are supposed to be... and it serves its purpose well. Anyways, I think it just ties it into the fact that Romeo and Juliet is just this timeless thing; love doesn't change. I enjoyed!

    Peace, LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2007-05-20 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how you peppered this with quotes from romeo and juliet, surely one of the most famous love stories/plays in history...

    so, is this about a guy you fancy, huh? hehe, nice one ;)
    zd
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by zen-dog | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is nice- when i saw the title, i thought it was more cliché but wow, this is good, i like how you in this relationship try to picture a romeo and juliet scenario yet it seems things aint moving...am in a hurry but i will come back and comment more. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]


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