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    dots Submission Name: Runningdots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRunningdots
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    My Hurt and confusion is following me
    Itís my shadow everywhere
    No where to hide
    And no where to run
    I canít get away as hard as I tryÖ
    Please just donít ask why I cry
    Every time I think about it
    More tears seem to fall

    The clouds are settling all around me
    And the storms just brewing for disaster
    Can I run any faster?
    Can I protect myself from the pain?
    Oh, hereís the rain
    Run faster, faster itís falling




    Submitted on 2007-01-27 23:13:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Kimmy,

    I enjoy the way you convey the art of escape here. Though this is a state that I hate to think about people being in, you present it well with your words..

    Some of it seems a bit clichť, with the "nowhere to hide" and "nowhere to run", but it picks up in the second stanza.

    I certainly hope this isn't purely about your current state, but I think that this first person character would find the happiness waiting when the clouds pass if they would simply quit running with the storm, and choose instead to face it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by indianhog74 | [ Reply to This ]


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