Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: morning vestmentsdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 770
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 915



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsmorning vestmentsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    when i'm all strange and the early feathers
    wheeled about in messy hair
    i'm loosened like a loving leaf explored
    and my hands fold inward towards your heart

    stunning morning vestments slumber
    while evening fingers still haunt the air
    sacred brushings pushing winter skin
    memories engulfed in smile

    i am lost in the cells of it
    each liquid pouring thought
    great comedies engraved bold shadows born
    anchient molecules of deep clinging

    i recall dizzy dreams releasing hollow cups
    spines aligned with stars above
    the sacred geometry of our unfolding faces
    like two birds inside a jar

    i await the summer harvest
    the travelled time of soothing sleep
    the brilliant way the light displays
    our intricate bodies curled aloft






    Submitted on 2007-01-28 10:07:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      wow you really really do know what you mean don't you. Like the other comments, your poems amaze me ^_~ the diary project thing sounds cool is it for yourself or for some class?
    and how long does it take you to find the right words?
    | Posted on 2008-07-02 00:00:00 | by bannathebanana | [ Reply to This ]
      so some lily white dream captivates with "like to birds in a jar" darling you never cease to amaze me.
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      You amaze me yet again. There is so much feeling and passion in this piece, that even I, a nonreader of love peotry/prose am moved to enjoy it.
    Well done.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      don't know what else to say......I just like it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by tirebiter24 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cute..I really like the 2nd, 3rd, and 4th stanza..it gave a nice description/prose. I'm very into originality and you seem to have that and more..great writer
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    133322

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Linger written by saartha
    Can't let my demons go written by faideddarkness
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    On Loop written by Daniel Barlow
    Wavelength written by saartha
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    When Crows Tick on Windows written by metallichick786
    This written by Chelebel
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    ME written by jjd
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Commencement written by Ramneet
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    The Promise written by annie0888

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry