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    dots Submission Name: morning vestmentsdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 723
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsmorning vestmentsdots

    when i'm all strange and the early feathers
    wheeled about in messy hair
    i'm loosened like a loving leaf explored
    and my hands fold inward towards your heart

    stunning morning vestments slumber
    while evening fingers still haunt the air
    sacred brushings pushing winter skin
    memories engulfed in smile

    i am lost in the cells of it
    each liquid pouring thought
    great comedies engraved bold shadows born
    anchient molecules of deep clinging

    i recall dizzy dreams releasing hollow cups
    spines aligned with stars above
    the sacred geometry of our unfolding faces
    like two birds inside a jar

    i await the summer harvest
    the travelled time of soothing sleep
    the brilliant way the light displays
    our intricate bodies curled aloft

    Submitted on 2007-01-28 10:07:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow you really really do know what you mean don't you. Like the other comments, your poems amaze me ^_~ the diary project thing sounds cool is it for yourself or for some class?
    and how long does it take you to find the right words?
    | Posted on 2008-07-02 00:00:00 | by bannathebanana | [ Reply to This ]
      so some lily white dream captivates with "like to birds in a jar" darling you never cease to amaze me.
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      You amaze me yet again. There is so much feeling and passion in this piece, that even I, a nonreader of love peotry/prose am moved to enjoy it.
    Well done.
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      don't know what else to say......I just like it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by tirebiter24 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cute..I really like the 2nd, 3rd, and 4th stanza..it gave a nice description/prose. I'm very into originality and you seem to have that and more..great writer
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]

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