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    dots Submission Name: Regreted Suicidedots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsRegreted Suicidedots
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    Can you hear that?
    It's the razor falling from my hand
    The blood pouring from my arms
    Me falling to the floor
    As crimson surrounds me
    I scream wait
    With a gasp
    Wait a sec.
    I take it back
    All this pain I feel
    All my persious time being killed
    No! I don't want to die
    I'm starting to regret suicide

    How can this happen?
    All that happened was my
    Heart broke in two
    And I saw it lying there
    It glicened in the light
    It said take me
    Let me ruin you, It'll be fun
    Blood is better than tears

    So I am now dead
    On the bathroom floor
    I went thud
    ANd I said by to the cruel, cruel world
    Ending my life
    At 14 years old
    It will always be bad
    That my life was so sad.








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      Wow I like it, nice work I like the visual and how it felt real and especially with emotion, I like this poem alot I hope to read more from you as I hope you will read from me anyways, again you did a good job, keep it up peace & stay safe.... -Cordell
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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