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    dots Submission Name: Love divide into anotherdots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 508
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       This is for my best friend


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    dotsLove divide into anotherdots
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    One sweet guy
    CAn change a life
    The kiddness on one
    Is better than none

    How can one person
    Love so much
    He gives and gives
    But gets none back
    It's like he doesn't care how
    Much I slack

    I love him so much
    I don't know how to show it
    I pleauser him in ways
    Not apropet to all

    And now I am lost
    ANd my stomach out
    To were my feet are out of sight
    And it's name is lilly




    Submitted on 2007-01-28 13:32:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it shows your true feelings, for sure. You might want to look once more, there are spelling and random mistakes that makes me hink you were in a rush. But overall, very emotional--typical of you.

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it but it's alittle confusing. THe flow is off and the spelling is not that great. But I like the emotions behind it...


    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]


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