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    dots Submission Name: Brokendots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBrokendots
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    A broken girl that cries every morning
    A wish that was never granted…
    A dream that shattered to the ground
    A light busted, lying down on the floor

    Every piece, I try to put together
    But little pieces pass on by
    How can I make this exactly the way it was?
    Can there be enough glue, and tape to put it back
    To hold it directly in your hands,
    And not see a crack?

    How do I put the pieces back together?
    How do you I put you together?
    How can I make you the same?
    Just the way you came,
    With your smile, and grace




    Submitted on 2007-01-28 18:02:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thsi was written well, flowed nicely, and had alot of emotion, the only thing I didn't like was that it didn't have enough explanation, and it ended a bit abruptly. Maybe go back and add a little more to the end, then it would be magnificent. Keep up the nice work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]
      things are constately changing all the time and things never go back to how they were , its a great piece of writing and a subject of great thought , i loved it
    well done

    Elaine
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      Some things (and people) just can't be put back together.
    I like this. My favorite part was:

    "How can I make this exactly the way it was?
    Can there be enough glue, and tape to put it back
    To hold it directly in your hands,
    And not see a crack?"

    I enjoyed the descriptions.

    Sorry I can't make this comment better. My mind's empty this evening.

    Nicely done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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