Description: It's called Goodnight because she's going into a sleep that she will never wake up from. I guess goodbye would be more appropriate, huh? oh well.
But anyways, this is about a girl who was shot and she's trying o write a goodbye note to her family or loved ones. She doesn't want to die and she's afraid.
This was wrotten very well, I liked it alot. It flowed quite nicely, and was worded wonderfully, the only negitive thing I have to say is the title doesn't really fit with your poem. You never talked about goodnights or dreams or slumber, but of a frozen, cold, near death person dreading going into the light. Other than that, it was fantastic! The emotion really got to me. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.
This write is extremely descriptive and well written
To me you are describing someone who is on their last breath or who is sadly planning on ending their life and they are finding the words to say Goodbye to Very Hard to find
I have been in these same shoes at one time and I have to admit you nailed the sentiment perfectly
I cant say how happy I am to see you back writing again
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
This was a good peice that was very descriptive, however I feel it was kind of bland. Now when I say this, I don't want you to think I mean not enough description, as there was enough, or that it was boring, because it wasn't. When I say I think this was bland, I mean I think it needs more character, more something to stand out. Just my peice of advice.