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    dots Submission Name: Trapped Withindots
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    Author: Darklonelygirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    1.87 - 148/90/61
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 614



    Description:
       Over the last couple of weeks my life has been turned upside down yet again.


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    dotsTrapped Withindots
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    Shut away from society's view
    Stares too hard to bare
    Doors shut, Curtains drawn
    Myself I cannot share


    If people would look inside
    See the heart contained within
    Instead of only seeing me
    For my outer skin


    They would be so surprised
    Of what they were to find
    A loving, gentle, caring soul
    Who is forever kind


    My illness it has ravished me
    Can't get it out of my mind
    Praying that it won't be long
    I can leave it all behind






    Submitted on 2007-01-28 20:12:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish this was longer, but it's very good. If only outward appearances didn't matter to people. I blame society for not teaching acceptance and for saying beauty is only skin deep. Anyway, I'll go into a rant and that's not what I want to do, so I dig this write, excellent!
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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