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    dots Submission Name: Blinddots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    How could I have been so blind?
    How did I know you werenít going to be mine?
    Days are slower now without you
    And I cannot face that what you say is true
    It hurts so much to see,
    That youíre there without me
    And I canít convince you to talk
    You just shrug it off, and walk

    Memories invade my head
    As I lay and shed tears in bed
    Reminiscences that I thought were amazing
    When you were breathtaking,
    They all become my heartache
    And as a wake,
    I look at my surroundings, everythingís the same
    And all I feel is pain

    I canít take another day without you
    I canít make it on my own, I need you
    I need that smile that brightens my entire day
    I donít want to be blind anymoreÖ






    Submitted on 2007-01-28 20:28:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sad to say we all feel like this (and you have expressed it so well) when a loss turns up in our lives. If the person walks away don't go a-chasing, it's not worth it as it just means more heartache for you and you have a life to live.
    Anyway, I liked this, nicely expressed and pleasing to the ear.
    Thank you.
    Donald
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]


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