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Empty Altar


Author: Liv2LoveThePain
ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527 /1515 /256
Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Empty Altar



An empty altar summons you,
tied up and gagged before deceased.
The carcass of tomorrow burns
until the body count's increased.
 
Shattering skulls of it's victims,
it swallows their eyes and black tongues.
Midnight's clouds still swell with your tears,
but this secret won't leave your lungs.
 

Another icy tomb and just one pulse too long
beneath where you belong.
Plan your escape again, then witness it go wrong.

 
An iron altar carries you
a few steps closer than the rest.
The past is a vice to still you
until blood hardens on your chest.
 
Serpents build a cave in your heart.
It's a rise that no one will see,
and in this place south of Heaven,
you'll rot in immortality.




Submitted on 2007-01-28 22:55:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  a very picture painted piece
you've still got the most amazing and metaphoric descriptions of any one i know. the flow and rhythm i think seems to be not as together as you usually have it, but the morbid words still make it an incredible write
the last stanza was defiently my favorite especially the part about rotting in immortality. sounds tortureous
a very pretty piece indeed!
write on
LoneWolf
| Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by LoneWolf | [ Reply to This ]
  darkly beautiful. what can i say. you've stolen all the worlds and given bitter life to the voiceless masses moving on forgotten souls. empty ritualistic violence. i envy your talent. once agian a moving piece.

~rach
| Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  darkly beautiful. what can i say. you've stolen all the worlds and given bitter life to the voiceless masses moving on forgotten souls. empty ritualistic violence. i envy your talent. once agian a moving piece.

~rach
| Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW
I found this to be a very angry write directed at someone who it seems hurt you badly
I have had this same sentiment myself to some people in the Past
It truly is sad when someone is so weak that the only way they gain happiness is through hurting others
Great Job!!!
Its good to see you posting again I havent seen your name in awhile
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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