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    dots Submission Name: Empty Altardots
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    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1629
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 880



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    dotsEmpty Altardots
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    An empty altar summons you,
    tied up and gagged before deceased.
    The carcass of tomorrow burns
    until the body count's increased.
     
    Shattering skulls of it's victims,
    it swallows their eyes and black tongues.
    Midnight's clouds still swell with your tears,
    but this secret won't leave your lungs.
     

    Another icy tomb and just one pulse too long
    beneath where you belong.
    Plan your escape again, then witness it go wrong.

     
    An iron altar carries you
    a few steps closer than the rest.
    The past is a vice to still you
    until blood hardens on your chest.
     
    Serpents build a cave in your heart.
    It's a rise that no one will see,
    and in this place south of Heaven,
    you'll rot in immortality.




    Submitted on 2007-01-28 22:55:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a very picture painted piece
    you've still got the most amazing and metaphoric descriptions of any one i know. the flow and rhythm i think seems to be not as together as you usually have it, but the morbid words still make it an incredible write
    the last stanza was defiently my favorite especially the part about rotting in immortality. sounds tortureous
    a very pretty piece indeed!
    write on
    LoneWolf
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by LoneWolf | [ Reply to This ]
      darkly beautiful. what can i say. you've stolen all the worlds and given bitter life to the voiceless masses moving on forgotten souls. empty ritualistic violence. i envy your talent. once agian a moving piece.

    ~rach
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      darkly beautiful. what can i say. you've stolen all the worlds and given bitter life to the voiceless masses moving on forgotten souls. empty ritualistic violence. i envy your talent. once agian a moving piece.

    ~rach
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW
    I found this to be a very angry write directed at someone who it seems hurt you badly
    I have had this same sentiment myself to some people in the Past
    It truly is sad when someone is so weak that the only way they gain happiness is through hurting others
    Great Job!!!
    Its good to see you posting again I havent seen your name in awhile
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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