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    dots Submission Name: Pacifist Submergeddots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPacifist Submergeddots
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    Does it show,
    A vacancy, thatís full of holes.
    Hold me please, Iím feeling cold.
    Please donít look to close at me,
    You might not like what you see.
    Tenderness in her voice,
    Could kick me off course.
    Would make me choke,
    Could cut my throat.
    Imagine me taught by tragedy,
    Release is peace,
    A different kind of lost,
    At a sullen cost.
    I saw you standing in a crimson dress,
    Tattered and wrinkled in the perfect mess.
    Pounds of love in my skull.
    The thought of you never dulled.
    So freely it spun, spun ,
    Around like the sphereic sun.




    Submitted on 2004-01-31 00:33:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first half gives me chills...so greatly written...but the second half, while good, kinda withers away for me, like you tapered off or maybe I did. Great flow, though.
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by JKPS613 | [ Reply to This ]


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