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    dots Submission Name: Camisoles and hailstormsdots
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    Author: all the english boys
    ASL Info:    15
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 173/239/46
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    why can't i be
    the one with the lace camisole
    basking in the hailstorm
    of a thousand blown kisses
    only to find her ratty hair
    her bright eyes
    to grow smoother, brighter?

    why can't i be
    the one with the streets blocked off
    to appeal to her needs,
    for the most addicted
    get what they most desire
    and i'm left with nothing?

    why can't i be
    alone? she'll ask to a darkened image
    lurking beyond her peripheral vision
    and i'll reply
    why can't i not be?

    this will echo across the fields of pearl
    where our subjects will bow, knees dirty
    grass stains along spines
    and then silence.




    Submitted on 2004-06-05 13:43:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you ever listen to dashboard confessional? the story depicted in this piece is something i would imagine would be a music video for them. the emo-sadness of wanting to be everything for someone who perhaps wants nothing to do with you. or at least that's what i took away from this. don't worry - it may just be my sad panda frame of mind at the moment. beautiful pictures you've painted, tinged with the longing of desperate tears left unshed in glassy, wide eyes. great write! =]

    ~Blue
    | Posted on 2004-06-06 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
      So you have a famous friend? Hmmm....I'm not sure but I like guessing who you and the other person are and what your relationship is, or if she knows you at all. An interesting and well-written read.
    | Posted on 2004-06-05 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]


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