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    dots Submission Name: Sounds like a Winner to Medots

    Author: Strator
    ASL Info:    22/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160/142/67
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSounds like a Winner to Medots

    I am not a victim, I am a survivor,
    And I intend to keep it that way.
    I am not helpless, I am strong,
    Enough to be brave to enjoy the day.

    I am not a victim, I am an enthriver,
    And will thrive in this moment that counts.
    I will fight to live positive,
    And leave the victim thinking out.

    I am not a victim, I have the power,
    In this choice in this moment thats here.
    No longer will I allow mental skies to be grey,
    But sunny, focused, determined and clear.


    The battles will rage but I am a winner.
    For what I fight with and for is Just.
    A victorious Destiny, my life is the prize.
    So a win is not a maybe but a must.

    I am not a victim, I will not cower in the face of outter or inner adversity.
    For I fight with a power and strength from God, friends and family.

    Armed with positive thoughts and happy memories, nourishing verses Day by Day, my triumph is assured.
    I am a survivor, I can do it. I HAVE TO DO IT!!

    Because I am not a victim anymore.

    Submitted on 2007-01-29 17:12:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's the way!
    I saw this earlier but was unable to comment on it then, so I return to give a hopefully more detailed and better feedback.
    First off, the title is quite normal but I'm fascinated, what made you write a poem with such a positive feel even when it mentions adversity, rather than the usual depressive stances of youth in general?
    Secondly, the content is simple and yet so effective in putting and hammering in the message. Take for example:

    I am not a victim, I will not cower in the face of outter or inner adversity.
    For I fight with a power and strength from God, friends and family.

    Such simple lines, and yet so powerful. That has to be my favourite part.
    Thirdly, the overall rhyme just gives it the flow of determination that perfectly joins the piece together.
    Cheers, thank you for the read.
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]

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