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    dots Submission Name: Say Wha?dots
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    Author: Strator
    ASL Info:    22/M/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 160/142/67
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSay Wha?dots
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    You think you can win....haha,
    Your Wrong.
    You think you can keep this anger down,
    Your highly mistaken friend.

    With your thoughts of power and strength,
    You feel you can win and thrive...
    It's fucking bullshit, shut up and die.

    I hope you know I see your family,
    Carefully planning each day, oblivious to the change of that day.
    The day of reckoning, the day of pain.

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    These battles were chosen didn't you know...
    You couldn't have seen it coming,
    That is fo sho.
    You didn't see the signs...oh the signs.

    Driving down the highway, singing your songs, makes me feel all warm and tingly inside. Oh that song, "Highway to Hell."
    You don't like it very much, I am sorry,
    I just tried to warn you....

    But alas....you get a flat tire and swerve under an 18 wheeler...Damn that Blows!
    And you wonder why...

    That optimism Sucks.




    Submitted on 2007-01-29 17:22:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Accidents happen in life my Friend
    God never promised us Happiness on Earth he Promised us Eternal Life in Heaven
    And Though I am not rushing Death I am eagerly awaiting the fact that Eternal Life awaits me
    You did a good job with this and your use of words to describe your emotion was very good
    Nice Job!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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