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Keep Losing While I Wait

Author: Reckoner
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Words: 200
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always be my protector

Keep Losing While I Wait

My blood is covering a growing dread
wary of the night
I will not sleep in my bed
too close now
the moon sees everything under the spread
and will not stay silent

cover your eyes and cut into me
I have never seen a screaming blue light
red is the only color that exists in front of me
a mood that is calm and completely absent
another face that is barely visible to me
I never believed that you could feel it too

used to think that this shower of blue light was my cloak
one day long ago I dreamed against a soft pillow
the next night I fell back in a chair and my eyes spoke
took a oath of pure faith
and then suddenly my heart woke
when my sun came to me later on it was too late

caught in trap
that I myself devised for nothing
fell into the gap
between serving the moon or eclipsing it
until I have another nap
I will never know which to apply to

a place beside your lips or as that shadow left behind you

Submitted on 2007-01-29 21:43:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  again, so sad. but we are in a darker place then usual. we will talk about this when we are better...but it is still beautiful and it still touches my heart that someone would write out how i make them feel. it's beautiful. thank you. I love you.

| Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]

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