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Darking Dawn


Author: Shadow_Mirror
ASL Info:    23/m/CA
Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 54 /39 /18
Words: 107
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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I made this out what I could... I haven't written in quite awhile, so please give me some lee way, lol... anyway hope you people enjoy it!


Darking Dawn



This morning the sun is rising,
with its rise, the black clouds of lightning form above,
while I await my judgment below,
the wind stirs, whipping my hair to and fro.
The lightning cracks, but I still stand,
'May my sins and deeds be laid bare, and weighed equally!' echoes to the heavens, making the challenge.
One strike, two, three.... still standing once again.
The clouds start to recede, leaving only light of dawn.
'So another day goes by,
with my blacked,
shattered soul still here...'

...The dawn leads forward to another day....
...where it is only the beginning of another ending...




Submitted on 2007-01-29 23:17:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, kinda...eerie and foreboding.
great write tho'.

'where it is only the beginning of another ending...'

this i like...it ends this perfectly, makes the reader want more, but at the same time, draw their own conclusion...if ya understand me.
really nice work, and where have you been????
you aint posted in like....FOREVER!!! LOL

enjoyed this,
michelle
| Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really good
It is true that from the moment of our birth we are preparing for death
You worded that really well
The Good thing is Death is not the end as it leads to Eternal Life
And That is also the truth
I wait mpatiently for the day I can enter eternal life
I also like how you talked about there always being good and bad as you spoke of when you were referring to the 3 strikes
Excellent work!!
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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