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    dots Submission Name: Not Againdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 431



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    dotsNot Againdots
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    Im never going to fall in love again
    It hurts too much
    And I hurt everything I touch
    Im to blame
    We both know its true
    Its my fault I fell for you
    Theres no way to stop it
    But stop it I must
    Before I loose everyones trust
    Not ever to hear those words
    Atleast not from him
    Ill hear them this once
    But Untill Then Never Again






    Submitted on 2007-01-30 04:49:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you got some pretty cool lines in this poem
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty cool piece here. There were just a few improvements that I would add/change. Line 9 "Before I loose everyones trust" I would change it too before I loose everyone I trust.

    Line 10 "Not ever to hear those words" Never to hear those words again.


    And line 12, "But Not Never Again" But untill then, never again.

    That is all, other then that I thought it was a very emotional and original piece. It was splendid. Great write,
    -aNNmARIE


    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]


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