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f the law

Author: dudethis
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f the law

we are the type of clique
goodie shoes shouldnt hang wit
if you cant hang, you're out
not talking about walking
it's yellow tape and chalking
need no survivals
snitching to five'os

taken to court many times
couldn't connect to the crimes
the law's watching me closely
haten cause no evidence
tax payers paying costly
and I'm the crook?
I'm trying to pay bills
living each day broke

Submitted on 2007-01-30 11:25:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ...and I'm the crook?
I'm trying to pay bills
living e[a]ch day broke

... seriously. The world's a bit tipsy. It's all lopsided and itchy. Blind fear that's attached straight from these people's bank account to their babymakers.


[censored] the law indeed. >.<
(well... more or less... [censored] the twisted sons of biatches that make life hell for people who haven't done anything.... but i'm glad they're there to some extent. to control murderers and rapists and all that... but is it too much to ask for nice cops? honest cops? hahahahaha)

My little brother got arrested yesterday, for setting off stink bombs. Seriously. Arrested.

Things are taken too far.

Way too far.

(little nitpicks: line 3, i don't know what 'it' is doing there... i'm slow on the uptake, but... yeah... dunno...
and line 6, do you really want 'survivles'? haha it's cute. i don't know if you want this to sound cute )

Thanks for sharing. Even if you are a gang member
(don't kill me)


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