f the law

Author: dudethis Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 233 /135 /25 Words: 69

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f the law

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we are the type of clique goodie shoes shouldnt hang wit if you cant hang, you're out not talking about walking it's yellow tape and chalking need no survivals snitching to five'os taken to court many times couldn't connect to the crimes the law's watching me closely haten cause no evidence tax payers paying costly and I'm the crook? I'm trying to pay bills living each day broke

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...and I'm the crook? I'm trying to pay bills living e[a]ch day broke ... seriously. The world's a bit tipsy. It's all lopsided and itchy. Blind fear that's attached straight from these people's bank account to their babymakers. Jeeze... [censored] the law indeed. >.< (well... more or less... [censored] the twisted sons of biatches that make life hell for people who haven't done anything.... but i'm glad they're there to some extent. to control murderers and rapists and all that... but is it too much to ask for nice cops? honest cops? hahahahaha) My little brother got arrested yesterday, for setting off stink bombs. Seriously. Arrested. Things are taken too far. Way too far. (little nitpicks: line 3, i don't know what 'it' is doing there... i'm slow on the uptake, but... yeah... dunno... and line 6, do you really want 'survivles'? haha it's cute. i don't know if you want this to sound cute ) Thanks for sharing. Even if you are a gang member (don't kill me) Har. Kidding. ...

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