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    dots Submission Name: f the lawdots

    Author: dudethis
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 233/135/25
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsf the lawdots

    we are the type of clique
    goodie shoes shouldnt hang wit
    if you cant hang, you're out
    not talking about walking
    it's yellow tape and chalking
    need no survivals
    snitching to five'os

    taken to court many times
    couldn't connect to the crimes
    the law's watching me closely
    haten cause no evidence
    tax payers paying costly
    and I'm the crook?
    I'm trying to pay bills
    living each day broke

    Submitted on 2007-01-30 11:25:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...and I'm the crook?
    I'm trying to pay bills
    living e[a]ch day broke

    ... seriously. The world's a bit tipsy. It's all lopsided and itchy. Blind fear that's attached straight from these people's bank account to their babymakers.


    [censored] the law indeed. >.<
    (well... more or less... [censored] the twisted sons of biatches that make life hell for people who haven't done anything.... but i'm glad they're there to some extent. to control murderers and rapists and all that... but is it too much to ask for nice cops? honest cops? hahahahaha)

    My little brother got arrested yesterday, for setting off stink bombs. Seriously. Arrested.

    Things are taken too far.

    Way too far.

    (little nitpicks: line 3, i don't know what 'it' is doing there... i'm slow on the uptake, but... yeah... dunno...
    and line 6, do you really want 'survivles'? haha it's cute. i don't know if you want this to sound cute )

    Thanks for sharing. Even if you are a gang member
    (don't kill me)


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