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    dots Submission Name: Remaining Truedots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRemaining Truedots
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    Donít ask me not to love you.
    Donít beg me to walk away.
    Donít think that I can remove
    all these feelings
    because of words you say.
    You canít control thatÖ
    there not yours to throw away,
    and I will love you as long as I want to
    no matter how fast you walk away.
    Your harsh words can hurt me.
    Your distance can cause me pain.
    Your anger can scare
    but it canít compare
    to all the love that I haveÖ
    to these feelings that remain.
    I told you forever,
    I told you Iím yours,
    I canít take it back now,
    I canít shut the door.
    My tears are my own
    but every thing else belongs to you,
    discard them if you will
    but they will always remain true.




    Submitted on 2007-01-30 15:46:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nothing worse than unrequited love, but instead of the usual pleading, I like the strength behind the words " they're not yours to throw away" an original take on an age old feeling.
    7/10
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, this is heartbreaking. i really feel this one. doesn't matter what is said or done...your love will always be true...very beautiful...but so very sad.
    excellent piece.
    michelle
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Its a nice piece and sounds like what would be a top quality song verse you should put it under lyrics.
    I like the use of repetition when you say i told you and also i can't take good work!
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Mr R | [ Reply to This ]


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