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    dots Submission Name: Humanity!dots
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    Author: corruptedspirit
    ASL Info:    26/Male/England (Swindon
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 160/185/56
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 137
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 702



    Description:
       This piece is far from finished, i need to add one or stanzas plus tweak the existing ones.

    I want to end it with a moral message, but can't find the words that i need in my head at the minute.

    All suggestions are greatly received....


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    dotsHumanity!dots
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    What a vile and nefarious world we've become,
    Religious wars fought in the name of a false deity,
    An ever growing presence of narcissistic egos,
    Children dying from their intemperate creators.

    Existence for us a mere perforation in time,
    Yet we plunder our gifts for inconsequential goals,
    Wealth is overrated, love too easily understated,
    Poverty could be easily cured, but alas our greed endures.

    We've become a society of voyeurs and idealists,
    Watch the horror, but refuse to acknowledge it,
    Everyone's a guilty party, but no-one accepts blame,
    Eyes kept closed, as bad as the murders hand.




    Submitted on 2007-01-30 15:52:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love these type of poems, not because I'm a conspirator against the government nor those who constantly [censor] about how life is going to hell, but for the fact that these types of poems hold more passion than most poems of love and devotion wish they themselves held.

    Though i will admit there seems to be a few poems out there that express this sort of thing but not quite in the context that you have worded it. All in all I like this poem it was written beautifully and came across in the way you wished to portray it. well done.

    ~Nikki
    | Posted on 2009-01-25 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Danny, this was very good. I like it. The world is very corrupted and is getting to be crazy. The people are changing and the countries and nations are growing apart. This was really right on with all that.

    Very nicely written.


    Zach
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]



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