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    dots Submission Name: rope burn.. song versiondots

    Author: battousiaxxx
    ASL Info:    17 male ct
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 5/7/10
    Words: 359
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
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       idk i liked this poem i wrote so i made it a song

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    dotsrope burn.. song versiondots

    (BEFORE YOU READ! note that the lines that end in an ! are said in long angry growling sylables... and the lines surounded by ( ) are quick quiet wispers thank you..tell me what u think)

    rope burn: (song version)

    I took a long look,
    Deep into me.
    Found the noose,
    That tugged at my neck.

    Looked at its path.
    On the other end,
    You stood,
    And tripped me off my feet.

    Don't you even hear what I say?
    Understand the way that I feel?
    Can't you see what I see in you?

    Maybe next time ill remember just how bad…

    (Just how bad)
    It compels me!
    This stupid thing that they call love.

    (n’ now its)
    All around my throat.


    Like a twisting saw,
    The friction on my skin,
    Unyielding and taut,
    It paints a blood red ring,
    Leaving marks branded raw.

    If I ever love again I prey to god it won’t be like this…

    (oh god… now the)
    Rope begins to burn!
    Ripping skin from flesh.

    (and my)
    Hands clasped tight!
    Keeping me afloat.

    (while my)
    Legs flail mad!
    Trying to break the knot.

    Fear the way that you peer into me,
    Like a book,
    You opened this tale,
    Tore the pages,
    And rewrote it yourself.

    Tragic hero!
    Novel of,


    And when these caved in arteries collapse,
    And my neck is finally snapped,
    Burry me with the worms,
    That infests all this bullshit manure,
    That you pour from that ass you call a mouth.
    But I ask,
    You filthy witch,
    Leave this bloody rope around my neck,
    to cover scars you carved,
    and hide my ill repute.

    If only there would be a next time, but…

    (I’m down to)
    My last breath!
    Sealed inside the lungs.

    (I can't feel my)
    Limbs go numb!
    As my mind begins to fade away.

    (So tired, now)
    All goes black!
    While you point and laugh at me.

    Submitted on 2007-01-30 17:16:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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