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    dots Submission Name: In Memoriam Revisiteddots
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    Author: Ben Gunn
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 62/84/40
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIn Memoriam Revisiteddots
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    It's like
    A death in the family -
    with neither funeral
    nor wake...

    ...but I think
    a bereavement would
    be easier
    to take.

    Instead -

    We've nowhere to
    Lay flowers, and
    No focal point
    for grieving.

    It seems that
    something has died
    between us - without
    physically leaving..




    Submitted on 2007-01-30 18:05:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the way you wrote this, the structure of it, and the message behind it. Endings are so sad and i like the comparison to death.
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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