Three Little Words -------------------------------------------
you find your way in dark because I'm your shining light
you saw the world through different eyes so i try with all my might
flip the sands of every man and make them go berserk
the moment three words left my lips i knew it wouldn't work
three little words start war or peace and everything in between
love is a thought we all have, put a face to the unseen
flip through the pages of history to find out what is left of me
all alone in my bourgioisie lay in wait for our jubilee
hey this was a great piece eric. I really like it. Through this piece I really understood what you were saying. I really feel what you were saying. I felt the sadness of this poem. Im not going to be high and mighty and think this poem is about me....is it? I dont know. But i really liked it and felt it was apart of me.
Hummmm okay i have alot of thoughts on this peice ...
First thought i am very deeply touched by this peice because of the truth in it love can start alot of different things depending on who you are.
Second my favorite line in the whole thing
" you find your way in dark because I'm your shining light"
because so many people use a significant other as their strength ...
I really like this peice alot!!
I really liked it; definitely not a typical "three little words" poem...you thought about, and commented on, the other side of love which is really refreshing.
You had me captivated up until the last two lines. They didn't seem to fit the rest of the poem (though together they're good, just not as a part of this poem). I don't know what to tell you to do there, instead, though. BTW, did you mean "bourgeoisie?" And I wasn't a fan of the rhyme scheme/flow in the last line. Just my personal opinion though. Overall, a very good write.
Submission Name: Three Little Words
