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    dots Submission Name: It's my image..dots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       When people expect you to be happy all the time, and sometimes you just want to drown in your sorrows, and try to collect your thoughts.
    its the pain inside that you feel, and no one else sees.


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    dotsIt's my image..dots
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    you see this image that i place,
    that smiling happy face.
    but when my thoughts collect themselves,
    the thoughts that pile up on shelves,
    the thoughts that become my destruction
    you will soon see my true emotion

    Rage that takes control and it invades
    taking that happy face you see for days,
    My fear infects like a disease,
    bringing me to my knees
    How much it hurts to lash out on myself
    the thoughts are falling right off the shelf
    their flying every where
    their all up in the air

    Catastrophe is calling my name
    my thoughts are not the same
    Reminisce myself to the image I once had
    No more sorrow, anguish, or being sad
    I have to be the image everyone else wants to see
    Not my disastrous self, not me.
    I will be the image everyone believes

    And so i recollect myself everyday
    i put that image back up on display
    you see this image that I place
    that smiling happy face
    its my image…




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      I dont believe it is your image at all
    I believe it is the true Honest you
    You sound like a very caring person and That is very hard to find in this World
    Please do not lose that caring Heart
    Trust me their our A LOT of people who need to know someone does care
    Thank God you do!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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