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    dots Submission Name: last daydots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    20/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.46 - 60/203/178
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 179
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotslast daydots
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    i look back in my mind
    so many memories, so many lies
    all i knew was built from sand
    washed away with the tide
    everything i loved and cared for
    has crumbled away, leaving me wide open
    open to hate and anger
    my heart is dying, cant take this anymore
    ive become what i despise
    living someone elses life
    now im done i cant continue, last day left
    i see my end like a fast moving car round the bend
    its my last day living this life
    time to go time to end
    last day then im going away




    Submitted on 2007-01-30 23:29:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the ending of this poem

    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]


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