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    dots Submission Name: Entwineddots

    Author: TammyAnnBruton
    ASL Info:    31/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 202/148/30
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Standing at the water's shore,
    watching the waves while they are dancing,
    they seperate, then mingle as one,
    as if they are romancing.

    Watching this reminds me of you,
    how you gave me your heart and soul
    combined to make one unit of strength,
    accepted, we make eachother whole.

    The waves make me unsteady on my feet,
    my mind , oh how they do possess.
    I sit down to watch them more,
    dancing and crashing with finesse.

    Engulfing me with all that you are,
    your name engraved into my heart
    soothing my entire soul,
    not always together, but never apart.

    Now the sun goes down,
    and the waves begin to subside
    Merged together, forever,
    our love entwined, survives.

    Submitted on 2007-01-31 11:02:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lovely words used by you Tammy. Description is first class, and you painted a very beautiful picture with your words.

    Superb stuff from you.

    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Thia was written very well, and was very sweet. I have not one complaint about, it was truly perfect. The wording portrayed the emotion so well is brought tears of happiness to my eyes. It reminded me so much of the love I have now, and hope to have forever. I am adding this to my favorites. Keep up the magnificent work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]

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