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    dots Submission Name: My Baby Boydots
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    Author: TammyAnnBruton
    ASL Info:    31/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 202/148/30
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Baby Boydots
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    So young and full of energy,
    bouncing around with no cares,
    you will always be my baby,
    while you clutch your favorite teddy bear.

    Your ongoing insistence,
    even after telling you no,
    at least you are consistent,
    you have no worries and go with the flow.

    you are so young and free,
    maybe a little wild,
    you are adored by so many others,
    there's nothing like a spirit of a child.




    Submitted on 2007-01-31 11:06:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The spirit and innocence of little children is always a marvel to me. So pure, but they can be quite mischieveous as well.

    But they are still adorable.

    Very well written.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Very thoughtful and loving. We are all so involved with our children and notice them in so many minor ways that we otherwise would not pay attention to. With babies and dogs you can't go wrong for feelings.

    Technical glitches: You have three misspelled words to fix and an apostrophe to put in for "there's". Left as is, it distracts the reader. You might also want to refer to "the spirit of a child" or just say "a child's spirit" in the last line. Periods are unnecessary and sometimes it becomes too easy for them to form an incomplete sentence.
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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