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    dots Submission Name: ''the insane theater''dots
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    Author: crazyphreshone
    ASL Info:    31/M/NewYork
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 66/70/30
    Words: 428
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 104
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    Description:
       an opus of sorts,i was a little out of my mind when i wrote the original,hence the title.but is has been worked and re-worked into the piece it now is.it's a little long which i generally shy away from,but it most assuredly is an ''opus'' for that reason....


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    dots''the insane theater''dots
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    how do we exist with our eyes closed?
    how do we persist as the lies unfold?
    what is the meaning
    we are endlessly searching for?
    what is the feeling
    we are endlessly reaching for?

    a reason is an excuse,
    with motives and half-truths...

    nothing is a cancer until it consumes,
    life is like a bud until it blooms...

    don't forget to ask why
    on your way past humanity,
    don't forget you must die,
    and remember your gravity...

    take a good look around,
    witness a memory nostalgic in sound...

    everything is history,we write our own stories,
    turn a page in our book into the next morning.

    it's just a state of mind,
    it's the truth behind lies,
    it's everything we come to find,
    and it's the antithesis of our time...

    all that was can never be the same,
    all that is can never be rearranged,
    all that we are is a number and a name,
    all these thoughts envelop my brain...

    within persistance lies resistance,
    advice breeds adversity,
    words are like promises that
    cause all tipes of contraversy...

    all the lessons you learned
    never came from their advice,
    you had to learn the hard way,
    you had to live your own life.

    we all have problems,
    we're so wrapped up,
    we all have issues,
    that's so fucked up...

    i was unaware i had spoken,
    was unawre my thoughts were broken...

    providing a gift you can't appreciate,
    dividing you sift through what i abbreviate...

    heaven help us,damn us to hell,
    what's real or unreal we just can't tell...

    am i making sense is anything clear?
    things are so fucked up between my ears.

    i think it's time to break the mold,
    think it's time to buy back what we sold...

    disguised by the lies concealed in your eyes,
    thoughts of your freedom do not get me high..

    the drug in my blood is the pen in my hand,
    the theory of which you can't understand...

    contents of a bloodstream
    is just a state of mind,
    lost in the theorhetical
    dreamscapes of the blind...

    coming off quick and languidly linguistic,
    you're trying to hard
    because you've already missed it...

    the insane theater is closing for tonight.
    as i profess my lust
    for the creatures of the night.
    somewhere in the darkness
    we might see the light.
    somewhere in our minds
    we might conjure a sight.
    ladies and gentleman,
    have a good night.




    Submitted on 2007-01-31 12:01:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "the drug in my blood is the pen in my hand,"
    That is the line that stood out for me most. Oh and I have to say that I love title as well. I'm glad that this concluded with strength cuz you know I hate weakeness. Cheers to insanity! Fear and loathing anyone?

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    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      The first half of this Seems like you have been sifting through my head, I like the segregation of the stanzas making it seem like many small works rolled into one.
    It helps the flow of something this long tremendously.

    One problem I could see with this though was the change of tac near the end.
    You seem to be flowing fine in a state of mind but around the line
    "the drug in my blood is the pen in my hand,"
    You seem to go in a different direction as though you either lost your way or couldn't think of a way to end.

    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]



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