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Lovely Death

Author: Draigon
ASL Info:    25/m/Al
Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164 /196 /91
Words: 130
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Lovely Death

Dire is the need for love,
in a world so lonely,
so very lonely
Some love is in vain,
sanity erodes because of the strain

Saying "I love you"
doesn't mean anything anymore
"I love you" is slowly becoming
a part of folklore

When people say
those three words with meaning,
everyone takes it as routine
Love is breaking....leaning
toward an oblivion
It's leading us all to the guillotine

"I love you" is just a pebble in a vast lake,
the words just fade away
with the whispers in the wind
Closing the door
leaving you in depression,
where there is no day

A world without love,
how boring
Everything in shades of grey
Take a breath,
take it all in
Such a lovely death....

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  great piece. expresses the decay and overuse of the meaning of love.

'"I love you" is just a pebble in a vast lake,
the words just fade away'

great write

J. Ackson Jr.
| Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
  I can easily understand your point in this. The poem was composed very well, I think you did an excellent job transferring your opinion into this poem, the meaning comes across clearly. By adding clever adjetives to give this more of a negative tone, you make the poem as a whole feel like your negitivity and contempt for the overused words "I love you"

Maybe people should find a real way to express their emotions rather than something over expressed and often falsly exspressed by people who after all know nothing about real love, mature love. People do not always see that real love is painful. I think this was a great piece, I very thoroughly enjoyed reading this.

Sincerest Affections
| Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  By the title I didn't expect this at all. But Iliked it! It was written so beautifully. I love the way you wrap up the words and tie them with a bow before posting. Lovely! My favorite lines are:

sanity erodes because of the strain
I love you" is just a pebble in a vast lake
| Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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