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    dots Submission Name: Les jeunesdots

    Author: Guernica
    ASL Info:    17/male
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 77/114/67
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLes jeunesdots

    if you're feeling faint from chalked-up, grim and fleeting tumults
    wrapping their weight upon your heavy head; if you're cursing the dust,
    plucking strings off the scalps of your guitars and wishing, silently, to be emancipated

    or if you're worried your future's been written upon untarnishable paper,
    burned inflammably into the minds of your predecessors
    and that you'll die in the haze of a coming apocalyspe,

    know that life is very sparse, know that you must scrounge for shelter,
    kill for water and hunt for food, but salvation lies in the forests where you've yet to wander,
    rivers with rocky shallows still untamed and
    watching out for you all the while,
    we've thought up a plan

    that we might hide you in dusk and storm
    and you might be the harbinger of our day (your day),
    that endless day which plume-like ascends the sky
    and is recieved
    in a procession of light.

    Submitted on 2007-01-31 17:56:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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