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    dots Submission Name: Narcissisitic Mommydots
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    Author: Vasudeva
    ASL Info:    43/M/irrelevant
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 24/27/23
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 703
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       My happy little family......
    (yeah, right).


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    dotsNarcissisitic Mommydots
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    Mom.
    I just wanted you to like me.
    I tried to walk to the ends of the world for you.
    You weren't happy.
    You told me to jump.
    I said how high?
    Like the victim you demanded I be.
    You were amused
    when I cut off my dick,
    because it offended you.
    You knew you were entitled.
    You being you and all.
    I can't see you smirking now.
    I can't see your evil, ugly, bitter twisted mug.
    For that much I'm grateful.
    Because, when I realized I was going blind,
    I didn't go to the doctor.
    He'd probably refuse to treat me. anyway.
    You both don't approve of my "type."
    Don't you dare rock the boat, you said.
    Don't exist, you demanded.
    You laughed when I jumped out of the plane.
    Grinning madly in your skin covered skull, I suppose.
    Because I couldn't see
    you kept the real parachute
    for yourself.
    (Though you still didn't jump).
    That'll teach me to be adventurous.




    Submitted on 2007-01-31 21:24:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      No. That aint how a family ought to be?! Am sorry first of all. Yah, your description is sarcastic and then i knew how the poem would flow. Angrily yet calmly composed i must say since you use very good images and exploit some clichés to ellucidate your meaning.For example- You told me to jump.
    I said how high?"

    Your images constantly talk to me of abuse and well, all you want i s to please your mom but then you cannot because perhaps something is wrong with your look or something?

    I think you brought it out nicely.

    Some advice tho- forgiving is divine.

    God did that when He sent Jesus to die on the cross, He forgave us through the death of Jesus. You can take advantage of the forgiveness, forgive, because you have been forgiven.

    ICOR 13.

    God bless
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]


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