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    dots Submission Name: Fallen from Gracedots

    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       when you keep getting yelled at, when you dont know what you've done wrong..

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    dotsFallen from Gracedots

    I do have feelings.
    And they do hurt,
    I'm not to be used like dirt
    Yelling doesnít help, just makes things worse
    Iím about ready to scream and say every curse
    Youíre supposed to be my family!
    But youíre my worst enemy...
    You keep pushing on that envelope
    And here I am, about ready to take the rope
    Canít you see?
    Youíre hurting me
    Every word stings
    Why do you say these things?

    They hurt more than you know
    How could you tell me to go?
    Iím your own daughter,
    Youíre my mother and father
    Iím not perfect, and I make mistakes,
    But couldnít I get some breaks?
    For once, could the screaming stop, just for one day
    Iím just waiting for time to tick to May
    Iíll be out of your hands, and wonít bother you anymore
    I wonít be opening that door

    But Iím standing in the hallway,
    And screaming is all that comes my way
    Tears are streaming down my face
    Look how Iíve fallen from graceÖ

    Submitted on 2007-01-31 23:48:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well, the only thing I didn't like was thge flow, the lines through it off quite a bit. Other than that it was great. It reminds me of how my parents used to be, but I held in there, sattham down talked to them, adn straightened everything out. Maybe that;s what you should do. Awesome write. Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]

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