THis was quite original...for the fellows sake I do hope she was a she and not a he. This was incredibly interesting...it had a nice flow, it rolled quite well of the tongue...
"Squeeks of eyes and the unfit wise
which have left us far from home.
A broken heart that feel apart
and a swing that moves alone."
This is my favorite stanza, in my head I see lovers meeting on a playground, possibly in a park near the beach...there are children running round and here the fellow see's the lonely lady. He is attrected to her. I do love this. I hope you continue on.
Submission Name: Push it on back
