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    dots Submission Name: Percieved By Manydots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 730
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 855



    Description:
       Have you ever just sat down in a daze, and as if intoxicated, began writing...sometimes strage things come out. THis is what I got from describing a painting of Monet's.


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    dotsPercieved By Manydots
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    low and lovely, to my eyes they please
    gentle are the sweetly carressing waves
    they grow and they ponder
    and adore all the beautiful creatures living here
    we walk below the murky depths
    upon walking we stumble
    on an elegant path
    to there and here
    and a bit beyond us both
    it is no ordinary concept that was brought
    from sunrise to the setting
    on the sleeping sun, silent and vulnerable
    softly breathing
    and letting out
    a fire
    overlooking the bay, there was a boy observing each wave
    and he thinks about them
    quietly expresses his desire
    with a sigh
    his whispered delight carries in the wind
    washing the waves
    loveing the light
    crying on krill
    drinking from drops
    of salt and sea




    Submitted on 2007-02-01 11:03:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2007-02-04 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautifully written. Is the painting in your storypic thing the painting this refers to? To me it's about a magical world of some kind that a young boy is able to see.

    You might want to consider using proper capitalization and checking your spelling, but it doesn't take away from or add to the story.
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]


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