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    dots Submission Name: Weatherdots
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    Author: demolitionlover
    ASL Info:    18/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 12/31/23
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 788
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    Bytes: 530



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    dotsWeatherdots
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    Rain pours from dismal grey skies
    Tears pour from cold blue eyes
    But in the morning, the sun will rise
    To clean up the drops as it dries.

    The clouds part to reveal day
    And bad memories are chased away
    You bask, grateful for every ray
    While praying that the sun will stay.

    But eventually it has to rain
    And the steady flow increases your pain
    As happy thoughts go down the drain
    While the sky sobs outside your windowpane.





    Submitted on 2007-02-01 11:50:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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