"Goddess of the Sea" by Ron Cole

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Author:	Ron Cole
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A lovely maiden ascends to the shore
of an ancient, emerald sea
and all the creatures there adore
their Goddess of the Sea

the seabirds flying overhead
form a disciplined Vee
and Seals and Otters on the shore
salute her purposefully

the Dolphins and the Porpoises
wave excitedly
then swim backwards on their tails
singing gleefully

and when she enters the oceans depths
a guardian form presides
a guarding Porpoise takes his place
along her lovely side

the creatures of the Ocean depths
chatter incessantly
they're delighted with the presence of
their Goddess of the Sea

Ron Cole
February 2007

Submitted on 2007-02-01 16:29:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Whimsical, happy, a ray of light among the blue indigo of the sea. I tell you if I'd written something like this someone would have died or what, it's nice how you gave me a new perspective of generic Fantasy writing.

"and when she enters the oceans depths"

I was thinking "oh look black crevasses and whatnot" and instantly you just turn it around into joyous rings of creatures.
Amusing. I am captivated. I shall read more.
Cheers
Azuire
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, a wonderful and whimsical poem of the sea and mermaids, and so excellently done! Great rhyme and meter, quite flawless and an extremely fine poem! bravo... bravo ... bravo ... Michael
| Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow. pure perfection. this is amongst my favs of yours, it's wonderful.
isn't just so beautiful? i really wish i were dolphin or a mermaid! lol
i swear i was meant for the sea.
anyway, i'm placing this in my favs, i LOVE this!!
the image this puts in my head is stunning...thank you
michelle

| Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  An elegant poem. Good Job.
| Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a good poem, it brings vivid pictures of a unableable beauty that can not be among mankind for we can't handle the beauty of it all. you did real good again hear. i like your writings keep them up. joanna
| Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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