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    dots Submission Name: "Goddess of the Sea"dots

    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dots"Goddess of the Sea"dots

    A lovely maiden ascends to the shore
    of an ancient, emerald sea
    and all the creatures there adore
    their Goddess of the Sea

    the seabirds flying overhead
    form a disciplined Vee
    and Seals and Otters on the shore
    salute her purposefully

    the Dolphins and the Porpoises
    wave excitedly
    then swim backwards on their tails
    singing gleefully

    and when she enters the oceans depths
    a guardian form presides
    a guarding Porpoise takes his place
    along her lovely side

    the creatures of the Ocean depths
    chatter incessantly
    they're delighted with the presence of
    their Goddess of the Sea

    Ron Cole
    February 2007

    Submitted on 2007-02-01 16:29:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whimsical, happy, a ray of light among the blue indigo of the sea. I tell you if I'd written something like this someone would have died or what, it's nice how you gave me a new perspective of generic Fantasy writing.

    "and when she enters the oceans depths"

    I was thinking "oh look black crevasses and whatnot" and instantly you just turn it around into joyous rings of creatures.
    Amusing. I am captivated. I shall read more.
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, a wonderful and whimsical poem of the sea and mermaids, and so excellently done! Great rhyme and meter, quite flawless and an extremely fine poem! bravo... bravo ... bravo ... Michael
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. pure perfection. this is amongst my favs of yours, it's wonderful.
    isn't just so beautiful? i really wish i were dolphin or a mermaid! lol
    i swear i was meant for the sea.
    anyway, i'm placing this in my favs, i LOVE this!!
    the image this puts in my head is stunning...thank you
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      An elegant poem. Good Job.
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem, it brings vivid pictures of a unableable beauty that can not be among mankind for we can't handle the beauty of it all. you did real good again hear. i like your writings keep them up. joanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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